Hold the Sprinkles
Here's a short story by a person that obviously has something against Jewish sorority girls. Can the main character change in the end? Can she turn from her ways? Give it three pages and the story actually starts.
posted by AHFB at 3:01 AM
17 Comments:
do more podcast readings
wow, that was just, wow.
i just stumbled on your site and i think you rock... i always pick stuff up from the university printers if i notice it to use as scrap paper, but now i think i will start reading what i pick up. oh man.
This is a great example to show budding young writers in order to make the point that having a protagonist just known as "she" or "her" can result in awkward or puzzling structure. It's like, just give her a name, it'll help the flow immensely.
Passive voice hurts my soul.
I agree about the podcasts, this would be great fodder.
I've been on the lookout for some really bad poetry to be the next podcast reading and I've already got someone set up that wants to read it.
On a side note, thanks everyone for not posting comments when I do something dumb like misspell "definitely"
Regarding the "their" instead of "he or she," what do you think is proper? "he or she" reeks of attempts to PC-ize everything, doesn't read smoothly, and just lengthens everything.
I'm wondering if they teach a good alternative in your English classes.
i mean i just like saying "his" or "her" but if i remember correctly, this one didn't sub well. What sounds really stupid are all those papers where people are like "when one can see one's own objects." I just try and avoid it.
I had a shirt once--from a writers group mind you--with the quote "every writer has a monster in their closet" and it always sort of bothered me to wear.
maybe you can solve a conflict in my office [all of whom read your site, by the way]... was this a guy or a girl who wrote this? and do you think it is autobiographical or do "they" just royally hate greek life?
unfortunately, this is a story w/o a name (note nothings blurred) so I have no idea whether its a girl or guy.
No matter the gender of Author, this can't be autobiographical. It's gotta be someone w/ an axe to grind against sorority girls.
My first impression was that this was probably a guy, yet in discussing this with friends I find myself more and more saying "she" when referring to Author.
But really, can you imagine a girl putting this out?
My vote is that a guy wrote this.
In my opinion, the author is a she, who aspires to be the girl at the end who speaks out against the sorstitute. Short hair, vintage clothing, pierced eyebrow, but not enough guts to actually stand up to a brat in a restaurant.
I just noticed that the Facebook newsfeed uses "their" instead of his or her. Like "Kelly Schmelly has updated their profile. They changed their music tastes."
Now this makes no sense since Facebook _has_ the gender information accessible. Stupid.
See the January 2006 Language Log post Singular they with known sex for more commentary on that issue.
nice!
you sound like me looking at other people's writing ...
it's good to know that i'm not alone in the world.
that story about the jewish girl was terrible. this author obviously has no idea what they're talking about.
this blog is fantastic; keep it up. it's very amusing.
i had an aquaintance who worked at Mr. Greeks. she absolutely hated the soror girls, and she was a born again christian (so, not a jew fan). she tried to get in some writing program, i would bet this was written by her.
The following two things are not related:
-being a Christian
-liking/disliking Jewish people
or is this a brand new stereotype that's just getting off the ground?
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